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Issues of the Day Draft Three, Dance of the Uroboros, Completed

Late last November I posted  an item, "A Writer's Worry: On Completing Draft Two of Dance of the Uroboros" on this site.  I was referring to a novel that I began conceptualizing in 2009 and drafted intensively over the last two years. In the post I noted that in the course of an upcoming trip I hoped to read the second draft in its entirety during  two long flights. My purpose was to use these detached "islands of time" to critically read the text and assess if the storyline was consistent, the characters well-portrayed and the writing up to expectation.


Review, then Revision
The review took me several more weeks to complete than expected – flights, even long-distance ones, don't necessarily turn out to be conducive to critical reading and reflection and jet-lag and other commitments can get in the way too. Once I did complete my review I determined that the project was on track, though several kinks in the plot remained to be resolved and Dance still needed burnishing.  


Accordingly, in late December I descended into my writer's lair and commenced a third draft of Dance of the Uroboros, which occupied me over the last two months. I completed the version last week and copies have already been sent to several first readers, friends whose literary sensibilities I respect and who I trust will provide valuable feedback concerning the strengths and weaknesses of the manuscript.


A Writer's Worry: Does it Work?

The "writer's worry" that I referred to in the my post concerned the cogency of the work: Does it convincingly relate the character and story of the protagonist, Eitan, who is engaged in the struggle of his life as he copes with a terminal disease.  The only remedy to Eitan's solitary plight is a liver transplant that he is increasingly unlikely to receive.

As he contends alone with his deteriorating condition and its asault on both his body and mind,  Eitan embarks on an inner journey back into his traumatic past to gain insight into changes he would make in order to live more fully and meaningfully in the future. Dance describes a race against time in which the harrowing process Eitan undergoes is in itself healing. The lessons Eitan gleans holds truth for us all.


I expect that some revision in the text will result from the responses my first readers provide. But last week, while casually reviewing the Author's Note that I wrote  to orientate the reader concerning the characters, the languages they speak and the landscapes they inhabit, I found myself continuing to read  well beyond the Note: Without quite noticing, I had read five of the twenty-two chapters in one sitting. While there is certainly work ahead for a copyeditor, from what I have read so far, Draft Three conveys the story and its message with the craft and professionalism to which I aspire.

Placing the Book on its Feet

It is well and good that I believe that, but I await word from my key readers to see if they concur. Assuming that I receive a nod from them and then with a bit more work, I hope that a broader reading public will be able to judge Dance that for themselves.


I feel that I have brought Dance of the Uroboros through its gestation. It has been an exhausting process and it is not over, but telling this story was not something I could refrain from doing. And like all authorial offspring the time has come to place this book on is feet and let it make its way in the world. 

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